November 28

Declaration of Independence and Sentiments and Resolutions

You have two tasks.
1) Identify then describe one distinctive syntactic feature found in the Declaration of Independence. Once you identify this feature, explain the effect it may have created on the audience during the time just before the Revolutionary War. Why do you think Jefferson crafted this argument in this way? Did he achieve his purpose?

2) Elizabeth Cady Stanton’s Sentiments and Resolutions resembles the Declaration of Independence. Why specifically, do you think she chose to mimic Jefferson’s document? What is the significance of her doing so and how does this help to acheive her purpose?

Cite concrete details from both documents in your response. This is due by Friday morning. 🙂

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70 thoughts on “Declaration of Independence and Sentiments and Resolutions

  1. Bilguun B

    Bilguun Batdorj
    Ms. Keeble
    AP English
    Nov 30 2012

    1. Thomas Jefferson’s “Declaration of Independence” is filled with multiple syntactic features. He starts his paragraph with a super, long periodic sentence,“ When in the Course of human events, it becomes necessary for one people to dissolve the political bands which have connected them with another, and to assume among the powers of the earth, the separate and equal station to which the Laws of Nature and of Nature’s God entitle them, a decent respect to the opinions of mankind requires that they should declare the causes which impel them to the separation”,(167). This long periodic sentence has multiple meanings and allusions, it also prepares the audience for the rest of the article. The main effect of this periodic sentence is to rally the colonists for a common cause. The periodic sentence justifies America’s independence and challenges England’s morals.

    2. Elizabeth Cady Stanton opens her essay with the same periodic sentence that Jefferson did. The reason behind this is that the sentence can easily be used as a introduction to a declaration by any “oppressed” people. For example, If Tanzeel and Caleb were to stage a coup and write their own declaration of independence then they can use the same periodic sentence Jefferson used.

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    1. tashak38 (Post author)

      Replace “super” with a more acadmic word. Also, revise to move your evidence,your quote, out of the first paragraph. This is excellent. Push yourself to be rid of these two elements. They diminish your credibility.

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    2. tashak38 (Post author)

      Use ellipses to cut the length of your quote. You do not need to write out the whole quote. Not at all.

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  2. Tanzeel H.

    Tanzeel Hak
    Ms. Keeble
    AP English, Period 2
    30 November 2012

    In “Declaration of Independence,” future president, Thomas Jefferson, spoke out about how everyone should come together, split away from the British, and create a new government. Jefferson used many syntactic features in the document. One significant one was, “When in the course of human events it becomes necessary for a people to advance from that subordination in which they have hitherto remained, & to assume among the powers of the earth the equal & independent station to which the laws of nature & of nature’s god entitle them… all men are created equal, that they are endowed by their creator with certain unalienable rights, that among these are life, liberty, and the pursuit of happiness” (Jefferson 163). Since Jefferson began the document this way, the audience automatically concluded that he is a good person and on their side. Jefferson started off talking about how there were divine rights that should be given to all citizens. He made the document the way he did because it was efficient, which resulted in it working. Jefferson was able to not only put King George in a terrible light, but also convince people that separating themselves from Britain, the citizens would be given many rights. The citizens would be cared about, not like before.

    Elizabeth Cady Stanton thought that if the “Sentiments and Resolutions” resembled the “Declaration of Independence,” it would get more attention. Both documents had a similar purpose too, so by structuring them a similar way, Stanton could get her point across just as Thomas Jefferson did. Stanton believed that if Jefferson could do it, so could she. Stanton stood up for equal rights and by doing that, a lot of people also began standing up for the cause too. Stanton along with a few other important people, did accomplish the goal of obtaining equal rights for women.

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  3. Alexis L.

    Alexis L.
    Ms. Keeble
    AP English 11
    11/30/12
    1.) The most syntactic feature in “The Declaration Of Independence” by Thomas Jefferson, parallel sentences was the tactic that stuck out to me the most.For example, “…that all men are created equal & independant, that from that equal creation they derive rights inherent & inalienable, among which are the preservation of life, & liberty, & the spirit of happiness; that to secure these ends…” (Paragraph 2, P. 163-164). During this time, the thirteen colonies wanted to become their own independent country; they no longer wanted to have “support” from the King. Especially at the time when this was written, no one really knew what was going on with the government. This most likely encouraged the people enough to support the war to receive the fair rights they were deprived of. I believe that Jefferson did get his point across when he wrote this.
    2.) I believe that Elizabeth Cady mimicked ” The Declaration Of Independence” because Jefferson got hia point across when he wrote it. The document had all of Jefferson’s points made, which was exactly what Cady wanted. Since “The Declaration Of Independence” is a very historical document, she knew that it would have a great impact on her audience. She achieved her goal with the help of this document.

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  4. Harrison Nguyen

    Harrison Nguyen
    Ms. keeble
    11/30/12

    1)One quote that really made an effect on the audience was “We hold these truths to be self-evident, that all men are created equal, that they endowed by their creator with certain unalienable rights, that among these are life, liberty, and the pursuit of happiness.” (50 Essays pg.168) This drove the men to keep fighting against the king.
    2) Elizabeth Cady wanted to also reach out to women and make them realize what the king was also doing to them

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  5. Phuong-My N.

    Phuong-My N.
    Keeble
    AP English, Per. 2
    29 November 2012

    Declaration of Independence and Sentiments and Resolutions

    1. A syntactic feature found in the “Declaration of Independence” is parallel structure, “…that all men are created equal & independant, that from that equal creation they derive rights inherent & inalienable, among which are the preservation of life, & liberty, & the spirit of happiness; that to secure these ends…” (Paragraph 2, P. 163-164). The effect it may have created on the audience during the time just before the Revolutionary War was encouraging people to stand up for what they want and defend themselves against the British. I think Jefferson crafted this argument in this way to show people what they deserve in order to get them angry enough to rebel against the British. I believe Jefferson achieved his purpose because shortly after, the Revolutionary War occurred.

    2. I think Elizabeth Cady Stanton chose to mimic Jefferson’s document because it was a powerful document but it said nothing about women in there, only men. Women back then did not have rights like we do today. Everything was dominated for men; for example, the Declaration of Independence. That document was written by a man for men. The significance of her doing so is that she brought attention to women and showed that they too, deserved the same rights as men. This helps her achieve her purpose because women were inspired by her actions and decided to take part in obtaining women’s rights.

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  6. Yarelli Lopez

    Yarelli Lopez
    Ms. Keeble
    AP English Language and Composition
    30 November 2012

    1) Thomas Jefferson includes various syntactic features in his writing and one of them is parallelism among his sentence structures. For example, he mentions the phrase, “He has.. He has.. He has.. He has..,” a lot throughout the Declaration of Independence perhaps to emphasize more on what the King of Great Britain did. Jefferson wants to clearly say the reasons why the King shouldn’t be the ruler of the thirteen colonies.

    2) Elizabeth Cady Stanton resembles the Declaration of Independence because she writes about the need of women to become independent from men. Stanton feels that “all men and women are created equal” but she sees that men feel superior to women. So she writes to let men know how women feel and to prove her argument she supports it with facts as she mentions, “The history of mankind is a history of repeated injuries and usurpations on the part of man toward woman, having indirect object the establishment of an absolute tyranny over her. To prove this, let facts be submitted to a candid world” (359). In other words, Stanton writes the Declaration of Independence but of women.

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  7. Merritt Walker

    Merritt Walker
    Ms. Keeble
    AP English 2
    29 November 2012
    1. In the prompt the “Declaration of Independence”, the distinctive syntactic feature that popped out to me was periodic sentence. The first paragraph is one long periodic sentence. “When in the course of human events it becomes necessary for a people to advance from the subordination in which they have hitherto remained, & to assume among the powers of the earth the equal & independent station to which the laws of nature & of nature’s god entitle them, a decent respect to the opinions of mankind requires that they should declare the causes which impel them to change”(163). This quote affected the audience in a powerful way. It demonstrated that Americans were ready to be on their own, and it gave them hope and it showed their pride to be independent and free. Jefferson crafted the argument this way to get more people to join their side. For Jefferson this argument was critical to persuade people to go against the British. Jefferson did achieve his purpose after the war.
    2. Elizabeth Cady Stanton chose to mimic Jefferson’s document to demonstrates the significance of her cause. She incorporated her entire essay to attract a lot of people. People might listen to her if her document is to JEfferson because they listened to her, maybe they’d listen to her.This is significant because she fought for women’s rights.

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  8. Abraham N.

    Abraham N.
    Ms. Keeble
    Period 5
    AP English 11
    29 November 2012

    1) In Thomas Jefferson’s Declaration of Independence, Jefferson used a lot of diction, syntax, and details to portray his point to the people. One syntactic sentence I found was on paragraph two of the historical document, which says, “we hold these truths to be self-evident, that all men are created equal, that they are endowed by their Creator with certain unalienable Rights, that among these are Life, Liberty and the pursuit of Happiness.” In that quote, Jefferson tries to connect with the audience by appealing to logos, or reason. The quote also sets up his next paragraph, where Jefferson lists certain laws that the King of Great Britain didn’t abide to if every man had unalienable rights. I believe that Jefferson achieved his purpose of getting his point across to the people, and if he didn’t get it across, the people wouldn’t of supported the document, and they wouldn’t of declared independence.

    2) Elizabeth Cady Stanton, the author of Sentiments and Resolutions, chose to mimic Jefferson’s document because they both wanted the same thing, just from different people. America was resentful to Britain, and wanted to officially part ways, while women were resentful to men, for being treated unfairly for so long without any unalienable rights. One quote from the document, on the tenth paragraph, she states “He has made her, morally, an irresponsible being, as she can commit many crimes with impunity, provided they be done in the presence of her husband. In the covenant of marriage, she is compelled to promise obedience to her husband, he becoming, to all intents and purposes, her master–the law giving him power to deprive her of her liberty, and to administer chastisement.” I believe that this is another example of how the two documents are alike, they both use inductive reasoning to get the audience on their side. I believe that inductive reasoning has to be the most important aspect of both documents, because without it, you are just stating your opinion, which isn’t backed up by anything.

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  9. Maria

    1.) One syntactical feature that Jefferson used in his writing was parallelism. In this case he use “Ha has” to prove to people what kind of person King George is. “He has plundered our seas, ravaged our coasts, burnt our towns & destroyed the lives of our people.” (pg.165) Jefferson wants people to realize what this king is doing to them and make them turn on him. Another way he uses parallelism is by using “for..” continually. He wants to prove the same point as he does when he uses “he has..”

    2.) Stanton chose to mimic Jefferson’s document because she wanted to do the exact same thing he did except she wanted to do it with women. Jefferson includes men a lot in his document putting women to the side. Stanton wants to show society that women are as valuable or even more valuable than men are. She wanted to empower women just as Jefferson empowered men in his document. When she mimics his document in this way she would show how much power a women can also have.

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  10. Canyon R

    Canyon Riley
    Ms. Keeble
    AP English 11
    29 November 2012
    1). Thomas Jefferson demonstrates various forms of syntax throughout the Declaration of Independence, particularly parallelism. Jefferson attacks the king by saying,” He has erected a multitude of New Offices, and sent hither swarms of Officers to harass our people, and eat out their substance. He has kept among us, in times of peace, Standing Armies without the Consent of our legislatures.” (50 Essays, 217). As well as,” For quartering large bodies of armed troops among us: For protecting them… For cutting off our Trade with all parts of the world: For imposing Taxes on us without our Consent…” (50 Essays, 217). Through parallelism, Jefferson achieves his purpose by prompting the colonists to start a revolt. He crafted his argument in an assertive way by taking a leadership role. The colonists were more likely to follow a bright man who creates vigorous points than a man with a feeble spirit.

    2). Cady Stanton’s document is a parody of the Declaration of Independence. Cady Stanton starts her document by stating,” …that all men and women are created equal; that they are endowed by their Creator with certain inalienable rights…” (50 Essays, 400). But further in the document, she emphasizes the flaws of the Declaration by saying,” He has compelled her to submit to laws, in the formation of which she has no voice.” (50 Essays, 401). The same men who wanted to abolish England’s tyranny over the colonies, were tyrannical to their own people especially women. Through mimicry, Cady Stanton achieves her purpose by using syntactic phrases similar to the Declaration to arouse awareness to female inequality.

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  11. DaJohn Wade

    The Declaration of Independence is enriched with emphasis. Thomas Jefferson uses syntax so the audience can feel his feel his passion. One of his ways is repeating “for”. The usage of “for” when he discusses vital information adds more power to the points Jefferson is trying to prove. Another use of syntax is in the line, “We hold these truths to be self-evident, that all men are created equal, that they are endowed by their Creator with certain unalienable Rights, that among these are Life, Liberty and the pursuit of Happiness”. He consistently uses “that”. Jefferson’s lines are emphatic, direct, and the audience will remember this. He achieved his purpose by using this technique. The document and its most memorable lines uniquely embedded themselves in society’s mind.

    Elizabeth Stanton was clever for mimicking the document. She showed that women are entitled to everything a man is, and in this time era, women were lower than men. This was significant to her achieving equal rights for women because it did just that. This document and how she reworded it was the mark of when women’s progression in equality took a turn for the best.

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  12. Sidney

    Sidney 
    Ap English
    Period 1

    1)Jefferson uses syntax in interesting ways. Such as his repetition of  “He Has”  he seems to use this very often  in order to show his rebellion against the king of Great Britain. Using this term in other to  help alienate the king from the rest of the country and make a direct enemy for the colonies. If read right before the revelation war, many opinions could have changed and attempted to support the colonies. Which I’m sure it did. 

    2)Stanton, like many, will have reason to mock Jefferson and his work . I think she chose this document in order to show how unequal, and ironic this document really is. For a person who thinks every human has natural rights, he doesn’t offer them to the women of the human race. “having deprived her of this first right of a citizen…” She created this document completely parallel to the that of Jefferson’s in a woman’s version. It’s wonderful that she did this in order to show the irony in Jefferson’s words, and to attempt to make a difference for the rights of women. As others around the country began learning of this new effort, Women gained more supporters.

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  13. Dominique

    Dominique. This paragraph begins with “When in the
    AP English 11 Per 2
    November 29, 2012

    1. One syntactic feature I found in the Declaration of Independence was the very opening paragraph. This entire paragraph was an example of a periodic sentencecourse of human events it becomes necessary for a people to advance from that subordination…” that lead up to the conclusion, “they should declare the causes, which impet them to the change.” I think that this periodic sentence made the audience feel like there was suspense, and that it was a huge leap to start the story off with. The audience may have also gotten the sense from this first paragraph that the Declaration was going to be interesting just based off the information and formation of this large opening sentence. I think that Jefferson achieved his purpose, because as a reader I was left very curious after the first sentence and I wanted to read on to find out what it was about.

    2. I believe that Elizabeth Cady Stanton chose to mimic Jefferson’s document because he used a lot of different forms of syntax that appealed to the audience and grasped their attention. These examples of syntax played very significant roles throughout both documents and it was easy for each author to prove evidence for a clear arugment/side. The way Stantion achieved her purpose by mimicing Jefferson’s writing style shows through her own, for it was a very clear, straight forward argument that grasped my attention and kept me attached throughout the entire document.

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  14. Johanna G.

    Johanna G.
    Keeble
    AP Eng., Per.2
    29 November 2012

    1.) In the Declaration of Independence, Thomas Jefferson uses multiple syntactic sentences. A syntax that I observed throughout the document was parallelism. Jefferson writes, “He has obstructed the Administration of Justice…He has made Judges dependent on his Will alone…He has erected a multitude of New Offices…” (Jefferson 169). By using parallelism in his text, the audience will keep in thought of what He, King George III, has done to their country. I think that Jefferson crafts his argument this way because it emphasizes all the reasons of why King George III is an unfit leader. Jefferson did achieve his purpose because we are now an independent country.
    2.) I believe that Stanton chose to mimic Jefferson’s document because she wanted to reveal the irony in it. In the Declaration of Independence, Jefferson states that we, the people, should be given unalienable rights such as Life, Liberty, and the Pursuit of Happiness. However, women weren’t given rights till August, 1920. By mimicking Jefferson’s text, she got her audience to realize that men were just as at fault as King George III was. This helped her achieve her purpose because it made people grasp onto her concept that women should be treated as equally as men.

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  15. Haley Rosano

    Haley R.
    Ms. Keeble
    AP English 11 per. 2
    29 November 2012

    1. Jefferson used many different forms of syntax in the Declaration of Independence, but this periodic statement stood out, “We hold these truths to be self evident, that all men are created equal. that they are endowed by their Creator with certain inalienable Rights, that among these are Life, Liberty and the pursuit of Happiness.” (Jefferson, 168) Jefferson wanted people to feel safe; He wanted everyone to feel as if they belonged, even though he knew they did not. People see right through that statement in this generation. Nobody is “equal” and there are people who feel as if they had no rights. This passage should have been written with all scenarios stated. If everyone felt equal like they are supposed to, would we have all of the anarchy and chaos we do today?
    2. Stanton hit home when she added “women” to the excerpt from the Declaration of Independence, ” This is why she chose the to mimic the Declaration of Independence; she wants to show that womens’ rights have to be known. Women deserve the same rights as men, therefore Stanton is striving for the respect of her audience that reads this essay. Stanton used the Declaration of Independence in a positive light to get her audience thinking and help give her a stronger argument- which she had.

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  16. Trhas B

    Trhas Bairu
    Ms. Keeble
    AP English
    29 November 2012

    In Thomas Jeffersons’ essay, The Declaration of Independence, a mass number of syntactics were provided in the essay. In the book he quoted, “He has refused his Assent to Laws, the most wholesome and necessary for the public good. He has forbidden his Government to pass laws of immediate and pressing importance, unless suspended in their operation till his Assent should be obtained; and when so suspended, he has utterly neglected to attend them” (Pg. 168). He uses the repetition “he has” to explain how wrong and why they needed freedom. By doing so i very much so think he achieved his purpose.

    2. I think Elizabeth Cady Stanton chose to mimic Jeffersons document because as women were trying to gain rights and freedom, as were the colonists were seeking the same. Staton wanted the same impact how Jefferson made them feel. Mimicking Jeffersons’ document was no mistake, because just like Staton I believe women deserve the same equal rights as men.

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  17. Joelynn D.

    Joelynn D.

    Ms. Keeble

    AP English – 2nd

    30 November 2012

    Blog Response

    1) In “The Declaration of Independence,” Thomas Jefferson uses many different syntactic features in order to strengthen the text and make it more authoritative. One feature that is really striking is his use of repetition and parallel structure. When listing the different ways the king tried to exploit the people, he begins a majority of the sentences with “he has refused his assents…he has forbidden his governors…he has dissolved…” (Jefferson 164). By using “he has” repetitively, it creates a rhythmic pattern. This makes it much easier on the audience to follow along and retain what is being said, as well also makes it more authoritative which persuades the reader to agree with Jefferson’s ideas. I think that Jefferson crafted the Declaration of Independence like that because he knew the repetitive structure was more effective in conveying his beliefs.

    2) In both structure and formatting, Stanton’s “Declaration of Sentiments and Resolutions” is very similar to the Declaration of Independence. In mimicking Jefferson, Stanton demonstrates how gender-based the original Declaration of Independence was. Where the original declaration states, “that all men are created equal” (Jefferson 163), Stanton has changed to read, “that all men and women are created equal” (Stanton 358). By adding women in to the document, it exposes the true amount of sexism in the original document. She also mimics Jefferson’s use of repetition with “He has…”(Stanton 259) and adding the different ways men exploit women and treat them unequally. Overall, mimicking Jefferson added fuel to her argument because she took a very well known document. twisted it to expose how sexist it was, and still added her own message about women’s suffrage.

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  18. David .D

    David Delgado
    Ms. Keeble
    AP English
    29 November 2012

    One syntactic element that was in the “The Declaration Of Independence” was periodic sentences. In this document it says “They too have been deaf to the voice of justice & of consanguinity, & when occasions have been given them, by the regular course of their laws, of removing from their councils the disturbers of our harmony, they have by their free election re-established them in power.” (pg.166) The effect that it had on the audience of that time is it made them feel powerful and it encouraged them to fight. The reason why Thomas Jefferson crafted his argument this way is because he wanted the people to see that their natural born rights were being taken away from them. With this said I believe that Thomas Jefferson did achieve his purpose.

    The reason why Elizabeth Cady Stanton mimicked Jefferson’s document was because she wanted the same results he got. Also in the Declaration Of Independence it says that all people that are citizens of the USA deserve their rights. This helped Stanton achieve her purpose because she had “The Declaration Independence” to back her up on what she was about having equal rights between men and woman.

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  19. Diana Larios

    Diana Larios
    Ms.Keeble
    AP English 11
    29 November 2012

    1. Through reading the Declaration of Independence by Thomas Jefferson there are various combinations of Syntax that I identified and the tone was constant throughout the document. It was very broad and firm, in a way where it gave reassurance to the audience about what was being said. There was a quote in one of the passages that caught my attention and I’m sure caught the attention of others back when this document was released to the public, “We hold these truths to be sacred & undeniable; that all men are created equal & independent, that from that equal creation they derive rights inherit & inalienable, among which are the preservation of life, & liberty, & the spirit of happiness..”(163). This must have had an enormous effect on the audience because it is constructing us to believe that our freedom and independence is more important over all and that no one should have the right to take that away from us. It created a purpose for the addressees to keep fighting; it exhilarated their emotions to in some way make them support all of Thomas Jefferson’s decisions.

    2. This document was a statement made for American independence and freedom from England. Staton, as a women’s activist could relate to these reasons, that independence and freedom was essential regardless of gender, no one had the right to tell you what you could or could not do. The document made us look strong because we were very serious about all the actions that were made in order for this to happen. I think she was trying to make the audience aware that she was capable of doing the same.

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  20. Thomas T

    Thomas T
    Keeble
    29 November 2012
    1st period

    1) I notice that Jefferson uses a very accusative and persuasive tone when reading the declaration. Throughout the declaration, Jefferson persuades his intended audience that not only are they victims to the king, but are capable as people to separate and form their own government through syntactic accusations. “He has abdicated Government here, by declaring us out of his Protection and waging War against us. He has plundered our seas, ravaged our Coasts, burnt our towns, and destroyed the lives of our people. He is at this time transporting large Armies of foreign Mercenaries to complete the works of death, desolation and tyranny, already begun with circumstances of Cruelty & Perfidy scarcely paralleled in the most barbarous ages, and totally unworthy the Head of a civilized nation.” (170) Jefferson’s declaration has been effective in persuading his people to see their king as a tyrant and later caused the revolution.

    2) Stanton’s “Declaration of Sentiments and Resolutions” serves several purposes. She attempts to mock the declaration as men in America were hypocritical to women. Stanton’s resemblance the “Declaration of Independence” to compare men in the newly formed United States are no better than King George. They have little to no basic rights that should be given to everyone. “He has withheld from her rights which are given to the most ignorant and degraded men – both natives and foreigners.” (359) Women in this time period had been denied everything and were, as Stanton says, “civilly dead”.

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  21. Alexia George

    1. Thomas Jefferson wrote the “Declaration of Independence”  in present perfect tense purposely for many reasons and wrote with an inflammatory tone. Starting with “He has rufused his Assent to Laws…” (par. 8) Jefferson began the next eighteen paragraphs with “He has” and a different word following to describe his wrongs. It made the People realize the control and negativity from the king was recent enough for them to be concerned. The use of “He has” repedidly emphasizes how much more they deserved their freedom and independence. He crafted this document because he knew either way war was coming. Jefferson’s main putpose was to inform and persuade. His intentional plan was to declare independence with hope there would be nothing more. His arguement didn’t happen his way but in the end they got their independence.
    2. It was smart of Elizabeth Cady Stanton to mimic Jefferson’s “Decleration of Independence” because, although it was ugly, it was a success. Jefferson fought as a nation for independence and Stanton fought for womens’ independence. They had the same ideas so it made sense for their declarations to be worded alike. In paragraph 5, the quote “He has compelled her to submit to laws, in the information of which she had no voice” explains how women were left out. Accusing the men, like Jefferson did Britain, put the People on a guilt trip. If Jefferson’s declaration was for the most part a success, Stanton thought hers would be too.

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  22. Ryan C.

    Ryan C.
    Ms. Keeble
    Period 1

    1) One distinctive syntactic feature is that he mentions the rights of the people and their pursuit of happiness throughout the whole essay. (Jefferson 167, 168) The effect the essay had was having the audience feel like they are obligated and shortchanged to the rights they deserve. He crafted this document in this way because the king has repeatedly mistreated his people of Americas British colonies and needed to make the audience feel empowered and to feel they are supposed to already have these rights. This essay achieved its purpose because it created an evil aura around their king and let the audience know what is missing in their lives.

    2) Elizabeth Cady Stanton mimics the Declaration because it focuses on men, like when it says, “… to be self-evident, that all men are created equal…” Elizabeth is a women and the declaration clearly doesn’t say anything about women. The significance of her doing this is to add women to the Declaration so that human beings are created equal and not only a certain gender, which is man. It achieves her purpose because the declaration now includes women.

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  23. Areli S.

    Areli Sanchez
    Ms. Keeble
    AP ENGLISH 11, 2
    November 29th 2012

    1. Thomas Jefferson’s “The Decleration of Independence” contains different uses of syntax. One that stuck out to me is that in where the document uses parallelism, ” He has ….” , in order to make clear the actions that Britan has oppressed onto the people. This use of parellisim helps Jefferson make his document more powerful. I think Jefferson used syntax to make his writing powerful, he was able to do so and historically get support which seeved as one of the influences to the American Revolution.
    2. Elizabeth Cady Santon mimics Thomas Jefferson’s, ” The Decleration of Independence ” to execute her own document and format it that way to bring success and publicity to it. She does well in creating a successful mimic. As Jefferson she also used a form of parallelism , “he has” is also used in te document. I actually enjoy the document and find it very powerful, and the use of repition compliments the powerful voice she is trying to achieve.

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  24. Caitlin H.

    Caitlin Huie
    Ms. Keeble
    AP English Per 2
    29 November 2012

    1.) The Declaration of Independence has various syntactic features, but the periodic sentences were the ones that stood out. Jefferson uses this type of syntax when he writes, “When in the Course of human events it becomes necessary for one people to dissolve the political bands which have connected them with one another… a decent respect to the opinions of mankind requires that they should declare the causes which impel them to the separation” (Jefferson 167). This and his other usage of periodic sentences encourage and empower the people who agree. It also illustrates the seriousness of his argument and gives precise details to support his claim. Jefferson wanted to prove that the tyranny of the British government was not effective for the colonies and that they needed to separate for the colonies’ interests. With this document and his usage of syntax, I believe he achieved his purpose, but he also inspired others to do the same and fight for their rights.
    2.) Jefferson wrote the Declaration of Independence to fight for the colonies’ rights and liberties. Stanton’s argument is identical to Jefferson’s argument except that she was fighting for women. She’s asking for the same result as Jefferson and she wants to show the similarities between them. If men and the colonies were able to get rights, why couldn’t women? She is asking for the same outcome and is using the same evidence as Jefferson. It shows that there is no reason for women not to have equal rights.

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  25. Kiloni D

    Kiloni Driskell
    29 November 2012
    AP English, 2

    1) Thomas uses syntax in “The Declaration of Independents”. “We hold these truths to be self-evident, that all men are created equal, that they endowed…that…that..that..”(pg.168). The concluding paragraph relies on parallel structure and repetition of “that” in declaring the colonies “Free and Independent States.” Thomas uses a powerful language that will have an emotional impact on the audience. Thomas was getting them excited for a big change. He was getting the audience ready for a fight and he wanted to convince them that they can win, that they would not be alone, and that they can have liberty, freedom, and the pursuit of happiness. He made it clear that he wanted to be separate from Great Britain. I think he achieved his purpose.

    2) I think Stanton mimics “The Declaration of Independents” because the colonies had no rights and now the same thing was happening to the women. The women had no power and were going through suffrage. Stanton was going to do everything she can to fight. She wanted to be taken serious and want to remind them that this was not the last of her. I think she got her point across because her argument was similar to Thomas Jefferson.

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  26. Natasha R.

    Natasha Ramirez
    Keeble
    Period 5
    Ap English
    29 November, 2012

    1)A syntax I spotted was a perodic sentence, “Nor have we been wanting in attentions to our Brittish brethern.” (166) He may have used this was to explain the Americans were tired of the supposed help they were trying to do for the colonies. Jefferson is making a point to the Brittish that their assistance wasn’t need as well as that they were completely capable of making their own laws and such.

    2) Since Staton was a women’s actvist leader I believe that just as the colonist were trying to gain their indepence, women were as well. Since Jefferson’s piece of literature was a big slap in the face for England and made them realize Americans were serious about change, Staton tired to do the same impact. That is why I think Sataon copied the format of The Decleration Of Independence.

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  27. Zoey Madsen

    Zoey M.
    Ms. Keeble
    period 5
    AP English 11
    29 November 2012

    1. There’s a combination of syntactic language techniques presented in the document, as well as some ways of speech that creates a broad tone. The most common technique was periodic sentencing. For instance, Jefferson says, “That whenever any Form of Government becomes destructive of these ends, it is the Right of the People to alter or to abolish it, and to institute new Government, laying its foundation on such principles and organizing its powers in such form, as to them shall seem most likely to effect their Safety and Happiness.” (Jefferson 166). This is an addition of dramatic affect and seriousness. It’s a more assertive way of speech that increases his enthusiastic, empowering tone.
    2. I believe Stanton chose to write the essay because she felt a bold need to identify and point out the obvious flaws within the Declaration of Independence itself. Stanton says, “He has compelled her to submit to laws, in the formation of which she had no voice.” (Stanton 358). In my perception, I felt this was a very strong sentence because it has a very wide range of meaning, where throughout history women had little value and opinion. Stanton achieved her purpose when writing this essay because she used such a bold and important argumentative reference, The Declaration of Independence. It was a great way to pull everything apart and really emphasize how women weren’t a part of the “equal rights” along The Declaration of Independence.

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  28. Jasmine J.

    Jasmine J
    Ms. Keeble
    AP English
    29 November 2012

    1) Throughout the Declaration of Independence, Thomas Jefferson uses an accusatory tone. He puts emphasis on he, in reference to the king, to show the people that Thirteen Colonies needed separation from the King. The King was the one taking away their unalienable rights and taxing them without representation. Jefferson states, “He has refused his Assent to Laws, the most wholesome and necessary for the public good. He has forbidden his Government to pass laws of immediate and pressing importance… He has refused to pass other Laws…”(164). The use of repetition caught the people’s attention. I believe Jefferson was trying to rile up the citizens of the colonies because he knew that a war was to ensue. By crafting his argument this way, he hoped to encourage people to fight in the upcoming war. I believe it worked.

    2) Elizabeth Cady mimics the Declaration of Independence to show that women, too, deserve unalienable rights. They are human just as men are and when it comes to the rights of women, women are the thirteen colonies and men are King George and Great Britain. Cady stated, “He closes against her all the avenues to wealth and distinction which he considers most honorable to himself”, (par. 13). Like Jefferson, she used the repetition of the word “he” to emphasize her point. They were oppressed because the latter seen them as inferior, incompetent, and incapable of thinking and acting on their own. Cady used the same tactics the colonies used to gain independence, rights, and freedom. How might one rebuttal when the other person used your own strategy against you; one cannot. This helped her achieve her purpose.

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  29. Tanzeel H.

    Tanzeel Hak
    Ms. Keeble
    AP English, Period 2
    29 November 2012

    “When in the course of human events it becomes necessary for a people to advance from that subordination in which they have hitherto remained, & to assume among the powers of the earth the equal & independent station to which the laws of nature & of nature’s god entitle them… all men are created equal, that they are endowed by their creator with certain unalienable rights, that among these are life, liberty, and the pursuit of happiness” (Jefferson 163). Since Thomas Jefferson began the document this way, the audience automatically concludes that he is a good person and on their side. Jefferson starts off talking about how there are divine rights that should be given to all citizens. He made the document the way he did because it was efficient and it did work. Jefferson was able to not only put King George in a terrible light, but also convince people that separating themselves from Britain, the citizens would be given many rights. The citizens would be cared about, not like before.

    Elizabeth Cady Stanton thought that if the Sentiments and Resolutions resembled the Declaration of Independence, it would get more attention. Both documents had a similar purpose too, so by structuring them a similar way, Stanton could get her point across just as Thomas Jefferson did. Stanton believed that if Jefferson could do it, so could she. Stanton stood up for equal rights and by doing that, a lot of people also began standing up for the cause. Elizabeth Cady Stanton along with a few other important people, did accomplish the goal of obtaining equal rights for women.

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  30. Alicia

    Alicia O.
    Ms.Keeble
    AP English
    30 November 2012

    “We hold these truths to be sacred & undeniable; that all men are created equal & independant, that from that equal creation they derive rights inheret & inalienable, among which are the preservation of life, & liberty, & the spirit of happiness..”(163). The effect it may have had on the audience during the time just before the Revolutionary War was that it made the people be sure that they had to keep fighting against the King. Them hearing that they had to have “liberty” is what made them want to fight. This made the audience remember what was the sole purpose against the war. He crafted this argument in this way to make the people more angry and passionate towards the fighting of the war. His purpose was to make them have more energy towards the war. Jefferson was able to do this by all the truths he states in the document.

    In my opinion she chose to specifically mimic Jefferson’s document because it gave the sense of being a real document. Also, because it made her audience be more persuaded by her essay. Not only that but since the document Jefferson wrote did pass it makes people have confidence that this document will pass. ” He has never permitted her to exercise her inalienable right to the elective franchise”(359). Her sole purpose for making it this way was just to get the peopls attetntion and see that just as much as the men need to have rights women need the same rights too.

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  31. Andrea O

    Andrea O.
    AP English 2nd Per.
    30 November 2012
    Through Thomas Jefferson’s essay ,” The Declaration of Inde3pendence” , there are an abundant amount of phrases in which syntax is used to further emphasize the author’s purpose in writing the essay . Jefferson constantly uses that when saying “…that they are all endowed by their Creator with certain unalienable rights , that among theses…That to secure.” (50 Essays 167-168) . By using this synthetic device , Jefferson most likely achieved his purpose in convincing the people that a Revolution was necessary. In addition, his constant use of that highlighted the rights he was listing as it set those phrases apart in the pattern he created. I think he crafted his argument this way so that not only would the English see that he was being serious but the remaining of the colonists would see how necessary it was for them to fight for the rights they had been denied. In other words, besides seeking to justify the United States’ separation from England , Thomas Jefferson was seeking to convince his own people and to urge them to fight. I believe that he did achieve his purpose because the nation fought for its freedom and even motivated other nations to do the same.
    I think that Cady Stanton decided to mimic the way in which Thomas Jefferson wrote The Declaration of Independence to emphasize the ways in which women had been left out. The significance of her doing so was tell her audience that women had a voice and that they wanted it to be heard because it would hypocritical for men to criticize the failures of the king while they shared some of his faults. This was shown when Stanton says “He has never permitted her to exercise her unalienable right..He has compelled her to submit… He has with held from her rights…both natives and foreigners.” (50 Essay Pg. 359). In these lines Stanton lists the “crimes” that men have committed towards women by denying her the rights that they once claimed were unalienable. This helps achieve her purpose because she puts the values that the United States had claimed they stood for to the test and thus leads her readers to also question these so called truths.

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  32. Amacalli Duran

    Amacalli Duran
    Ms. Keeble
    AP English
    29 November 2012
    Thomas Jefferson thoughtfully placed distinctive syntax features in the Declaration of Independence to provide a powerful and fierce tone in the document. Thomas Jefferson used repetition through the document, especially when stating the crimes of the king. Thomas informed the readers that, “he has refused his assent to laws the most wholesome and necessary for the public good… he has… he has” (Jefferson 164). By using the repetitive phrase “he has”, Jefferson emphasized the blame he was placing on the king. The repetition enforced anger in the audience because it reminded them of the wrong-doings of their king and how they were being imprisoned by his tyranny. Although Jefferson’s main objective was to obtain freedom, he had already perceived the King would ignore his demands. Therefore, by repeating the crimes of the King, Jefferson discreetly declared the reasons why they would go to war. Jefferson achieved his purpose because the colonies did go to war and later obtained their freedom as independent states.
    Cady Stanton, like many other countries and organizations will later do, mimics the Declaration of Independence between it is the first document man has ever written to oppose it oppressor. However, in Cady Stanton’s situation, it is instead man, who women are attempting to gain freedom from. Staton states, “We hold truths to be self-evident: that all men and women are created equal; that they are endowed by their Creator with certain inalienable rights; that among these are life, liberty, and the pursuit of happiness…” (Stanton 358) The Declaration of Independence is a very highly important and historical document that helped gain freedom for men and more importantly the United States. By using the basic outline of the Declaration of Independence, Staton is implying the message that woman’s rights are just as important as those of men and the United States. Mimicking the Declaration of Independence did help Stanton’s protest because it brought more attention to her cause and also emphasized her cause. In the end, woman attained many of the rights they fought and protested for.

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  33. Sarai P.

    Sarai P
    AP English
    Ms. Keeble
    30 November 2012

    In the Declaration of Independence, Thomas Jefferson writes, “Future ages will scare believe the the hardiness of one man, adventured within the short compass of twelve years only, on so many acts of tyranny without a mask, over people fostered & fixed in principles of liberty, (50 essays, 167).” In this sentence alone, Jefferson is attempting to appeal to the general population of the United States, who fled persecution for having different views. Jefferson wanted to remind the people WHY they had left their homelands. No longer could rules from their past dictate them; the game, and the stakes were different. Jefferson formed his argument in this particular manner to not only make the King aware of his tyrannical acts, but also to remind the people that in order to succeed, there must be room to grow.

    Elizabeth Cady’s, Sentiment and Resolution much resembles the Declaration of Independence. Many opinions can be had over this, negative and positive. However, such resemblance proves that not only was the Declaration of Independence successful, but it was also a primary example to very many other countries. Cady much like Jefferson was looking to present her causes opinion and beliefs, by not only confronting the problem, but offering ethical examples as to why they were wrong.

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  34. Hannah R.

    Hannah Reddy
    Ms. Keeble
    AP English, Period 2
    29 November 2012

    1. “We hold these truths to be self-evident, that all men are created equal, that they are endowed by their Creator with certain unalienable Rights, that among these are Life, Liberty, and the pursuit of Happiness,” (pg. 168). During this time, the thirteen colonies want to become their own country; they no longer want to have “support” from the King. In this excerpt, Jefferson uses “all men are created equal,” knowing that slavery as going on during the 1700’s. I also believe that he knew that the Declaration of Independence would stir up some problems, so the reason he worded the document like this was to get everyone’s support and help, specifically targeting the slaves and poor white men. The then anticipated crowd’s reaction would turn from hatred towards these men (the framers of the Declaration of Independence) to patriotic because they all now are all equal so they all now suddenly share the same mindset. Instead of the rich doing all the work, the poor can take care of it because who would miss them anyways?

    2. Stanton chose to mimic the Declaration of Independence because the men were doing the same to women what the King was doing to the thirteen colonies. Women were given no rights whatsoever, the men didn’t protect them, and they had no say in anything. This was somewhat of a wakeup call to the men, saying that if you don’t step it up and give us our rights, then we will leave just like the colonies did to England. It was supposed to be used as a scare mechanism. Scaring the men into giving the women what they want. Also, I believe she wanted to get the men’s attention by saying, “Hey, we’re just like you too!” The men looked at women as if they were inferior, but the Declaration of Sentiments was to oppose that common thought and belief.

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  35. Ross H.

    Ross H
    keeble
    period 2
    29 October 2012
    “He has refused his Assent to Laws, the most wholesome and necessary for the public good. He has forbidden his Government to pass laws of immediate and pressing importance… He has refused to pass other Laws” pg 168. “In the Declaration of Independence” Jefferson use the term “he has” to make the reader remember what he was trying to make the remember what the king had done to them. During this time period the northern parts of the country were really being effected by what the king was doing. So using this phrase over and over again, should start a spark in the people to rise up and get rid of the monarchy. I think that Jefferson got it right, if i were in this ear i would be pissed off after hearing all theses things that the king has done. It would make me angry, and then in turn want to get rid of the king. Then start a new government, one that is ruled by the people for the people.

    As men wanted their rights she wants women to have their own rights. It is just like how the early Americans wanted to be free from the British. She wants women to cast off the shackles of oppression, and become better people. I think that this works for her argument because her topic matter is very close to what Jefferson was. They want to be free from the “man”

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  36. Gonzalo Haro

    Gonzalo Haro
    AP Lang. and Comp.
    Ms. Keeble, 1st
    November 29, 2012

    1) Jefferson uses repetition of “He has…”throughout the document. The repetition emphasizes that King George has done many questionable things to the colonists. “He has…” makes the list of offenses seem dreadfully long. This would make the reader really question the rule of the king. Americans back then would’ve felt a sense of being stepped on, and they would’ve wanted to do something about it. Jefferson wanted to be polite to Britain, but at the same time he wanted the people to rise up. Well the people did rise up, and the American colonies won the revolutionary war.

    2) Stanton wanted to tell the all-male government that they (women) too have been stepped on and tossed around. The British king did the same things that the American government was doing to women, and she wanted everyone to realize that. Once the government realizes that they have been oppressing the same way they were being oppressed, then they might want to change that.

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  37. Jonathan V

    Jonathan V
    Ms.Keeble
    period 1
    Ap Eng and Comp

    1. One of the quotes that stood up to me is “He has affected to render the military, independent of and superior to the civil power”. This quote includes the syntax enough to make the declaration have a little bit of more power that affected the way people looked at the seriousness of this. This section of the document seem more serious because the people needed the army this king was destroying to be able to defend themselves from different threats. Jefferson got his idea across too the people that without their line of defense they were prone to any attack and even have no choice but give themselves to the mighty king.
    2. In my opinion Elizabeth Cady resembled in her writing the Declaration of Independence to show power like that document did. Her document did not empower anything but the women, and this is fair because Jefferson in a way just included men in general pushing the woman aside. She felt like if this man could empower the people to get in their mind and let them see a world where no king told them what to do, it was possible to do the same but instead of being against a king she was going against something bigger called Society.”He has compelled her to submit laws, in the formation in which she had no voice”. He is not reffering to a man but all the men that make up the society, and deprive this women to breath the fresh air of equality.

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  38. valeria

    valeria
    ms keeble
    AP english
    29 November 2012
    The whole point of Jefferson’s speach was to make a purpose out of it. He had to have strong points that get into people’s heads and the history of the United States. He had to be smart of what he was pointing out because it will get his purpose of the declaration of independance to truly mean something. It was an ispiring speach to many people at that time and still is to some citizens that have an American heart. Even if people do not like this decleration, it overcomes them because it states a lot of freedom in these people. But did Jefferson ever show his real purpose? In my opinion, he did because up to this day, it is one of the mose famous and secured file in the United States. It is like the heart of this coutry because a lot of points and thoughts were put into it.
    She did a highlight of the Decleration of Independance by Thomas Jefferson because dince it is an important document, it would be easier for people to read her opinions. She went into further thought of Jefferson’s points for our generation.

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  39. Rachael B.

    Rachael B.
    Ms. Keeble
    AP English 11, Per. 2
    29 November 2012

    1. Jefferson used several syntactics throughout his declaration. One identified type was his use of parallel sentences. This was used when he wrote, “… For quartering large bodies of armed troops… For cutting off our Trade… For imposing Taxes…” and so on. With this sort of syntactic, the audience must have been captivated and certainly now aware of how they were treated unfairly by the British government. This was most likely used to encourage the people enough to support the war to receive the fair rights they were deprived of. Jefferson’s purpose was achieved since the war did happen due to the people’s demand since they aroused by his influential words.

    2. Stanton mimicked Jefferson probably to get the same feedback he did: support for women’s rights as he had for the American Revolution. The significance was how she focused and added women to parts of the Declaration to make it less sexist when she wrote, “We hold these truths to be self-evident: that all men and women are created equal…” In this way, she would gain support from many women and perhaps men who agreed with her and at last achieve women’s rights.

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  40. Efrain E

    Efrain E.
    Period 1
    AP English 11
    November 29, 2012

    1) “He has kept among us, in times of peace, Standing Armies without the Consent of our legislatures”(Jefferson 217). Jefferson repeats “He has” to maintain the emphasis of his arguments against the king of Great Britain. Jefferson crafted his argument this way to convince the audience that it is the king’s fault that the thirteen colonies wish to separate themselves from the British. He wants the audience to see everything that the king has done wrong and turn against him.

    2) “He has created a false public sentiment by giving to the world a different code of morals for men and women, by which moral delinquencies which exclude women from society, are not only tolerated, but deemed of little account in man” (Stanton 402). Stanton used the same structure as the Declaration of Independence as a way to point out the irony in the document. At the same time that the Declaration states that everyone should be equal and treated justly, the men who created it are telling women that they are not entitled to the same rights as men. In pointing out the fallacies in the men’s logic, Stanton presents an argument against the unethical treatment of women.

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  41. Jessica A

    Jessica A.
    Ms. Keeble
    AP Lang. and Composition, Per. 5
    29 November 2012

    1. Parallelism is one syntactical feature that Jefferson used in his speech. For example, “He has obstructed the Administration of Justice, by refusing his Assent to Laws for establishing Judiciary Powers. He has made Judges dependent on his Will alone, for the tenure of their offices, and the amount and payment of their salaries…He has kept among us, in times of peace, Standing Armies without the Consent of our legislatures…” (Jefferson, 169) Jefferson’s reiteration of “he has” imposes a greater attraction to the text on the reader. His use of “He has” suggests a correspondence between similar phrases– both similar in context and syntax. The use of parallelism strengthens the text, and effectively combines his thoughts. During the time before the Revolutionary war, Jefferson incorporated parallelism into his text to build off of one idea. In the excerpt above, “He” is King George III. By using parallelism, Jefferson exposed all truths about the King in an effort to persuade the new Americans to converge with his thoughts and revolt against the King. Americans wanted to be freed from his rule. Jefferson crafted his text in this way to reiterate his initial ideas and to empower the audience to feel what he feels. From this syntactical feature, he achieved his purpose. For instance, I myself felt empowered as I read the phrase “He has.” Each time, I felt the urge to say it to myself with greater strength and emotion.

    2. Stanton chose to mimic Jefferson’s speech in an effort to superimpose her thoughts into an official document. Doing so helped her mark the hypocrisy in the words spoken by heroes such as Jefferson. Jefferson wanted his country to be free from subjugation under the king. Similarly, Stanton desired for women to be free of conquest by men. For example, she wrote, “He has never permitted her to submit laws, in the formation of which she had no voice. He has withheld her from her rights which are given to the most ignorant and degraded men– both natives and foreigners…He has made her, if married, in the eye of law, civilly dead.” (Stanton, 359) Like with Jefferson, Stanton’s use of parallelism aided her in achieving her purpose. She laid a foundation from which she built on, and essentially all points of her argument were exposed. She empowered the audience to feel with her.

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  42. Brittany-Ann D.

    Jefferson wanted to make sure that Great Britain knew exactly why the United Colonies declared its independency. By doing this, he used a strategic way of writing. He used the syntactic feature of parallelism to emphasize rhetoric effect. The Declaration of Independence states, “He has refused his Assent to Laws, the most wholesome and necessary for the public good. He has forbidden his Government to pass laws of immediate and pressing importance, unless suspended in their operation till his Assent should be obtained; and when so suspended, he has utterly neglected to attend them” (Pg. 168). Jefferson used the actions of the King as parallelism. By repeating “He has…” it highlighted the exact reasons why the United Colonies needed their freedom. It had the repetition and identical structure to achieve Jefferson’s purpose.
    Stanton mimicked the same syntactic feature just as Jefferson to seek the same outcome as the Declaration of Independence did. She knew that if she used the same structure, she would achieve her purpose and win against those against her. The Declaration of Sentiments and Resolutions states, “He has made her, if married, in the eye of the law, civilly dead. He has taken from her all right in property, even to the wedges she earns” (Pg. 359). By using parallelism, it shows the significance and importance of the reasons why men as well as women should be equal.

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  43. Aaron Chon

    Aaron Chon
    Ms Keeble
    AP English 11
    30 November 2012

    1) “He has refused his Assent to Laws, the most wholesome and necessary for the public good. He has forbidden his Government to pass laws of immediate and pressing importance… He has refused to pass other Laws…” Jefferson employs repetition in the form of “He has” in describing the king to make it easier for people to remember. What he has been stating is a list of grievances from the King of England, and describing the consequences of his choices. The intended effect on the audience was to have them remember that the King would only continue to do wrong if they were to remain under his reign.

    2) “He has never permitted her to exercise her inalienable right to the elective franchise. He has compelled her to submit to laws…” The reason for imitating the Declaration of Independence was because it was the first document of its kind to speak out against a power and seek individuality or independence. This is demonstrated in the creation of many documents of independence and constitutions, as seen by France, Latinamerican countries, and even post-WWII Japan. By referencing the Declaration of Independence, the author is describing men as tyrants that are working against their good.

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  44. angela reid

    angela reid
    period. 1
    ms. keeble
    11/29/12

    1) “we hold these truths to be self-evident, that all men are created equal, that they endowed by their creator with certain unalienable rights, that among these are life, liberty, and the pursuit of happiness.” pg. 168 thomas jefferson. this affected the audience because thomas jefferson talks about how all men are equal and they have rights and freedom. they didn’t back in the revolutionary war. i believe he did achieve his goal but at the same time he didn’t due to some people being slaves still in different countries and yeah we have freedom but i dont think all men are created equal.

    2) elizabeth cady stanton wrote this story to show men that she was being serious about everything. she wanted to show men that she wasn’t trying to take this situation as a joke. she wanted to be respected and treated right. after writing this story her goal was accomplished.

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  45. Rachel N.

    Rachel N.
    Ms. Keeble
    AP English Language & Composition
    30 November 2012

    1) Of the numerous syntactic elements found in, “The Declaration Of Independence,” by Thomas Jefferson, periodic sentences was the tactic that stuck out the most to me. As Jefferson is explaining the offenses the King of Britain has expelled on them, he illustrates the actions that must be taken to protect their natural rights. “…& when occasions have been given them, by the regular course of their laws, of removing from their councils the disturbers of their harmony, they have by their free election re-established them in power…” (Jefferson 166). The effect this language must have implemented on the audience is pure empowerment. Not only was their voice being heard, but they were being encouraged to fight for their deserved freedom and justice. Jefferson formulated his argument this way because he wanted to be taken seriously. He desired to motivate people to see that their natural rights, rights they were born with, were being stripped away from them for the benefit of someone else. Now that the U.S. is it’s on country with this Declaration in place, Jefferson has more than achieved his purpose, but has influenced other countries to take the same route to social freedom and equality for all men and women.

    2) Elizabeth Cady Stanton’s, “Sentiments and Resolutions,” is a document similar to Jefferson’s, “Declaration Of Independence.” Stanton chose to base her document off of Jefferson’s because she desired to portray that women are equally as human as men and therefore, should be equally protected under the law. She felt that if the Declaration Of Independence and Constitution says all people who are citizens deserve these rights, then all people can obtain them. Moreover, she yearned to reflect how much these documents contradicted themselves if they didn’t apply to women as well. Women played just as important a role in growing America both financially and physically. Why would they follow a government that doesn’t include them in only a segment of the laws, but not all of them? This helps to achieve her purpose because it highlights how much women have been excluded from being just as free as men. Stanton not only wanted to convey that women are equal to men, but that they have had their natural rights taken away as well from the U.S. government and society itself.

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  46. Desiree N.

    Desiree N.

    Ms. Keeble

    AP Enlgish 11

    28 November 2012

    1) Franklin used proper English language syntax form, subject, verb, object. An example of this would be when he wrote, “We hold these truths to be self-evident…”(Franklin 167) He used this again when he tried to prove that Great Britain has become a tyranny over the states, “He has forbidden his Government to pass laws of immediate and pressing importrance.” (Franklin 168) This feature probably gived the audience a sense of formality and urgency. Benjamin Franklin was vary formal but he made sure his points were heard. I think Jefferson crafted his argument this way to show Great Britain that it needed to do something about this problem. I thought he had achieved his purpose, Great Britain got a hint that the States were very upset.
    2) Elizabeth Cady Stanton wanted to mimic Jefferson’s document because she wanted the same product as he did. Jefferson got everyone on his side for writing the Declaration of Independence, Stanton wanted everyone to support her cause as well. Stanton writes, “We hold these truths to be self-evident: that all men and women are created equal…” (Stanton 358), she wanted people to understand that women should also be allowed inalienable rights just like men were in the Declaration of Independence. This helped Stanton achieve her purpose because it gave her cause more reason behind it. Instead of being a cause just so women felt equal to men, but a cause fighting for rights that were given to all people by their creator.

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  47. Dartise J.

    1.) “for protecting them by a mock-trial from punishment for any murders….for cutting off our trade with all parts of the world”, (par. 14). It effects the audience by showing them how they are being taken advantage. He crafted it this way to inform them in a consistent way to show the harm being done to them. Yes, he received his purpose because everyone was upset at the King and agreed with Jefferson.

    2.) “He closes against her all the avenues to wealth and distinction which he considers most honorable to himself”, (par. 13). She chose to mimic Jefferson’s document because it’s a very successful document. Also, it had a lot of convincing arguments and intelligent word choices. The significance of this is to show that women should be given equal rights. People understood her more because her argument was similar to Jefferson’s.

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  48. Elisha Hussain

    Elisha Hussain
    AP English 11
    Ms. Keeble
    November 28, 2012

    This document contained various syntactics, but the one that I came across the most was periodic sentences. For example, ” When in the course of human events it becomes necessary for a people to advance from that subordination in which they have hitherto remained, & to assume among the powers of the earth the equal & independent station to which the laws of nature & of nature’s god entitle them, a deecent respect to the opinions of makind requires that they should declare the causes which impel them to change.” (Jefferson 163). This sentence clearly exeplifies itself as a periodic sentence. During the time of the Revolutionary War the emotions that might have been created are inspiration, hope and adrenaline. Jeffrson crafted this argument in this way because he wanted to get people interested into the document and while reading it experiencing adrenaline and hope. He obviously achieved his purpose because the Declaration of Independence was signed off as a document.

    Elizabeth Cady Stanton mimiced Jefferson’s document in order to cause attention to their document in a positive way. Meaning that she wanted people to take her in a serious manner, and respect her.Also I belive that she wanted men to understand that she was willing to do anything to obtain womens’ rights. The significance of her doing this is that it was helping women get what they had always desired and strived for . Also, she wanted to make it official and make sure that they weren’t taken as a joke. This helped her achieve her purpose because people actually stopped to read her document and took it into consideration. Her main goal was reached after this document, so she came out on top in the end.

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  49. Veronica V.

    Veronica
    November 28, 2012
    1st period

    1.) “We hold these truths to be self-evident, that all men are created equal, that they are endowed by their Creator with certain unalienable Rights, that among these are Life, Liberty, and the pursuit of Happiness”, (par. 7). This made the audience agree with Jefferson by realizing these were the rights they should be given and deserved. I think Jefferson crafted this document in the way he did to make his point across that they wanted to be free from King George. I believe he did get his point across.

    2.) “He closes against her all the avenues to wealth and distinction which he considers most honorable to himself”, (par. 13). I think she chose to mimic Jefferson because she knew this method would work and chose a form that was familiar to others. The significance of Stanton choosing this method is that she got her point across in a way she knew would work and by using similar sentences Jefferson had used.

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  50. Johan Ocegueda

    Johan Ocegueda
    Ms. Keeble
    AP English
    28 November 2012
    Thomas Jefferson states “he has plundered our seas, ravaged our coasts, burnt our towns & destroyed the lives of our people.” This syntactic feature not only gives the document that extra intensity but it also puts readers to think. especially at the time this was written. No one really knew what was going on with the government. If yu even made up a little dumb story there are still people that will believe you and get mad. Writing something like this just makes all of those little stories just that much more believable. Jefferson did a great job, he got exactly what he wanted. The way this document was written was just genius.
    I think that Elizabeth Cady mimics the Decleration of Independence because everything went prefectly for the Decleration of Independence. It was such a well written document. The decleration of sentiments was no exception when it came to this type of writing. Stanton also wrote a very well and powerful arguement. I have actually learned a lot about her. I have learned about Hariet Beecher the author of Uncle Sam’s Cabin. Also I have read a lot about Zora Hurston. All of these women contributed a lot to the womens rights. They all contributed to helping to get women to their goal. And Cady helped by writting this great document.

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